Write Me a Poem (in Contests)

50k to whoever writes me the best poem

rhyme or imagery are good

make it about punk rock or concerts

difficulty: i need it by tomorrow night

...to do it for 50k...or do keep my morals by not doing someone else's homework...lol make it your toj and I'll do it =D

sorry man i need the ToJ

hehe I can write you a poem about procrastination ;)

Procrastination
Tomorrow, I told myself. Tomorrow I’ll start it.
The birdhouse and the blueprints for the new house,
science projects, college applications and
other artifacts yet to be unearthed from
the bottom of my backpack.

Today arrived in stealth and left in
a hurry but Tomorrow
never came.

Tomorrow, I told myself. Tomorrow I’ll start it.
Messages from my boss devoured,
my email space with the appetite of a locust swarm,
my alarm the gratuitous ringing of my pager at
5 A.M.

The unceasing ticking of the clock heralded
the approach of the deadline.
A week left…five days…two days
but Tomorrow never came.

You didn't write that slurpz ;)

wanna bet? :P

never tried writing a poem but i've got nothing to lose and i need some money...here goes

with guitar and drum solo's that make people stare,
we live for the rockers with the crazy hair.

we enter the mosh expecting a push,
under our feet the ground turns to mush.

We listen to punk rock because it's insane!
we live for the song and it runs through our veins...

how does that work? let me know

a rhyming poem?!

/me pukes

hehe...i guess i'll help you >.>

im not sure if this is what you wanted...

And To Think That I Once Thought
of him as a failure, a non-conformist
that rebelled “just because,”
that his spiked neon green hair
was because he didn't like
how his principal went up to him one day
and said that his hair was too long.

And to think that I once thought
that his guitar playing was just a fad,
just a thing to keep him from thinking
about the violin his dad had chucked at him
while under the influence.

Now to look at him,
on stage and in the center of attention
with all the girls that we would have been drooling over
back in high school crowding him, asking him for his autograph,
and to be honored that I once knew him
as a playmate and a good friend.

There once was a punk rocker named slurpz,
His diet was sulphate and turps,
When performing on stage,
He dressed as a mage,
And CoC'd them all right where it hurts.

lol

when will you announce the winners?

keep up the effort guys they're all good hopefully i get more than 4 to judge

winner will be announced at 9pm server time tomorrow

Well I'll Give it a go. I title this Puck rock is cool. Let me know what you think just did this off the top of my head.



Punk rock is cool to the naked eye
it's fun on the outside but not to some,
people who rock are mostly stoners
and people who like drugs and violence.

Puck rock is cool to the naked eye
people think that it's all in good fun
but no one saw the man with the gun,
the man opened fire at the concert
and bullets flew.

Puck rock is cool to the naked eye
because no one knew what I had to go through,
as bullets flew and people ducked and covered
one shot rang out like a hundred,
the guy turned around and shot my brother
who is now dead because puck rock is cool to the naked eye.

Puck rock is cool to the naked eye
some may think this but it's not really true,
I will always think of my brother and that cold night,
I will never get to play fight with him again and have fun playing basket ball or hockey,
It's all because that man who was high a puck rock concert
that it was cool to fire wildly around him that night,
that man I looked up to and that so much of,
that man is me.

puck rock? :P

panda: O_o

How about a couple of haikus? Modern punk is horrible, but 70's punk is good, so:

punk rock is dying.
anarchy in the u.k.;
seventies were best.

But I suppose you're looking for something more like:

punk concert's rockin':
leather, spike'd hair, fists, and noise.
gonna mosh all night.

eh haiku's have to be about nature they are good though

they don't have to be about nature, though in the traditional style they normally were. times change...

Another try. Just another thing off the top of my head it probably sucks. Not even sure if you consider it a poem. let me know what you think. I guess I call this one "At Concerts no one thinks"


Concerts have rockers and rockers have fun,
they get paid by the show and make tons of money
they never seem to care about the people in the crowd.

Concerts have fans that attend all the time
the funs love to watch the rockers play and love to mosh
but where the fun ends and life begins is part of the rush,
many people never think about life later on when they have fun
but what about the people who clean up the parking lot where the people once rocked.

Concerts have people who clean and no one thinks of them
someone has to come out who is over worked and under-paid
to clean up after people who never even think about them,
no one has the right to say they picked the job
they have three little mouths to feed and a wife.

Concerts are fun because no one thinks when they are having fun but the guy who has to clean up he went to a concert once and made love to a stranger,
now he has three little mouths to feed and a wife,
he also has to clean up other garbage because of his decision,
it pays to think when your at a concert.

by the way in the first poem replace puck with punk

why you call me an O.o

wasnt calling you that it was the face i made after reading the first poem...

first:

nature stands
content considered
yes the wanderer can own
whats shared
that slow graceful dream


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second:

women lie
made
love
they blow
the temple with fake horses
I perhaps love you

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etc:

in mine wrought to kiss white
and now light night
arms all stones
the paradise of loves
that dread

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tonight
you made thin conversation
and a
dark high
red stars
derailing sure
revealing
one lake
a love strangely motionlessness

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my sun
one by galaxies horizon

loveliest set
moving arms all stones
her question
is and
was spent

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loving you trampled

loathing hues of together but he
go sweet and within these
the bars that a love just hooked

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clouds vanish
farther falling
them perpetual broken a
dark stars magic death
frozen
exist lake
loveliness rocks the news

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tonight stands

in buildings where they inmate together
short grave
race love
thou here
he multitudinous
one without

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beautiful the frozen
in believing

in iron
with cold knowledge
the thought and distance
I perhaps love you

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tonight
you made thin conversation
passion a lie
rains it echoes tunnel stones
her question
did


fall

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no one actually wrote any of these
they wrote themselves
i modified (very very slightly) a couple of them to make more sense

check out http://www.codeasart.com/poetry/darwin.html

Well sorry for making false accusations. Did you like either of my poems at all?

panda: yea they were good

for those who were thinking of entering but havent yet you only have 4 more hours to submit a poem

how would you value my poem?

how long do they have to be?

heres one:

screaming fans
flailing hands
blaring sound
all around

people screaming up on stage
looking too young for their age
im screaming without any fears
blood is dripping from my ears

yelling with the speaker box
i think i've gotten chicken pox
from the person to my right
who i think's a transvestite

i cant tell cause they cut their hair
im trying too hard not to stare
their voice is deep, their pants hang low
welcome to the punk rock show!


heh hope that works for you...good luck cm me if you want it longer/shorter/different ill be happy to help ya

how about mine? was it good?

IronGiant I like that poem the best hehe.

im enjoying all of the poems everyone has done a good job with these so yea winner will be annouced in about 35 mins

the winner is sav1909 50k will be sent shortly
i thank you all for participating you all did great and on another note maelstrom gets 10k cause i wrote another haiku by using one of the lines from one of his haikus