The Monkey's retirement party - write me a story (in Contests)


QBBarzooMonkey September 7 2005 11:15 AM EDT

No, not my retirement - just the name. I'm bored with "BarzooMonkey", so I'm going to celebrate my impending player name change with a contest. Besides, we need a little distraction around here :)
The prizes:
Grand prize: I'm not tellin', but I do promise it will be in the multi-millions of NW.
1st runner-up: If you're a supporter, I'll pay for your next new supporter item. If you are not, I'll pay for your supportership.

Okay, this is inspired by Mistress Reyna's story contest, but it's a little different -no botcheck words.
First, you need to do a little research - read my entry in that contest.
Now, envisioning that it is the beginning of chapter 1, and the chapter concludes with a decision that the 4 dogs (Princess WonderDog's minions) will travel to the SouthLands to investigate. Your job (this contest) is to title and write the beginning of chapter 2.

Rules:
- 750 words or less
-Don't make fun of this or kill off my characters -the idea is to impress me and write like I would
-Post here and keep it PG (obviously)

Right now, I am the sole judge, but I'd happily accept a volunteer or 2 to help me. I'm going to be on and off very sporadically Friday - Tuesday (my wife is going in for surgery Friday AM, so I'll only be around after they kick me out of the hospital at night, until she comes home), so this will run until Noon, server time on Tuesday, and with judging and prizes to follow soon after.

Game on!

Special J September 7 2005 11:16 AM EDT

Good show Barzoo!

BrandonLP September 7 2005 11:44 AM EDT

I'd love to help, should you need anyone to help.

QBBarzooMonkey September 7 2005 12:06 PM EDT

CAR!!!!

I had a CM request, and I'm going to indulge it, since this hasn't really started yet:
You can choose between 2 subjects for your story:
1. Title and begin chapter 2, as stated originally, assuming that the decision to investigate ended chapter 1, or
2. Finish chapter 1 - actually portray the events of the meeting & its conclusion.

I'm even going to allow for the truly inspired to enter twice - once to finish chapter 1, and a second time to start chapter 2. They must be separate entries, and will be judged as such, so you could feasibly win both the grand and 1st runner up prizes.

Game on!

Mistress Reyna September 7 2005 12:13 PM EDT

"Each of the representatives gave a courteous nod and bow King Shamus who seemed always regal and alpha like now seemed tired and domesticated.

"Greetings all, forgive my appearance as I have just returned from the front with news about the attacks," the king said as he sat at the table looking over the reports. "The raids that have ravished our southlands must stop, and thus I have summoned you all here for council. I feel peace, is the right step and I feel an envoy to the Barzoo King to negotiate terms for that peace is in order. The reason you are all here is I will need your support in this endeavor," with this the Kings eyes scanned the others carefully.

First to speak was the Princess “Dear king, this outrage on our lands in unforgivable and must be handled immediately. Sending an envoy to the heart of the enemy will surly end with harsh results. Who would you have go on this mission? I say we all bring our armies down on the BarzooMonkey King and end this problem NOW." It was obvious she was not content with the king’s opinion as many years ago one of her litter left to explore the southern region and never returned. Contempt blazed in her eyes as she held in a growl.

Sensei Boodapoo shook his head and looked to the king " Milord, the presence of the simian raids have been a problem for years, now the outright attacks on our lands do cause concern, an envoy to the Simian King would be a wise decision, but this envoy much show power both with fear and respect. I say we here before you, as well as yourself, take this on ourselves to visit the Simian throne. A diplomatic emissary could bring about more fundamental and reasonable outcomes to this situation than an all-out war. Sending a messenger could simply provoke the King into feeling he is a waste of our time and escalate the problem more," with that he stood stone still letting the notion sink in.

Jack the Bear growled “As long as the flea infested tree climber realizes we mean business and that if he tries anything it'll be kibbles and monkey bits for dinner... I'm fine with going I've been bored as of late. Too much peace, not enough fun," The constant 'Thud thud thud' of his tail knocking against the floor showed his excitement of possible battle.

Apollo looked to the king and nodded having served the king faithfully since he was a pup would do as commanded. The King rose and looked from each pair of eyes to the next.

"Tonight we will prepare for this trip. Princess, contact your emissary’s have them deliver orders to the other kingdoms if necessary we shall go to war, On the marrow we leave for the southern lands The four of us through our kingdoms we shall ride disguised as to not alert the population, when we reach the border of the simian kingdom we will request audience with their lord. Jack, Sensei, and Princess we will be venturing into danger and possibly risking our lives. It is for our country and our people so you will remain loyal to those who need us the most. We must get to the bottom of this... and it must happen with minimal bloodshed, last thing we need is our tails in an all out war."

With that the king turned and walked from the room, the fire blazed in princess Regan's eyes as she would rather sink her teeth into a simian as an enemy than belly up to one as an ally. Without a word she snapped through the door to her chambers. Sensei Boodapoo nodded his agreement with King Shamus as usual his methods were well thought out and planned he shook his head at the ambitious poodle as she stalked off. The Sensei walked outside to possibly see the kingdom one last time. Jack headed off the ready his gear this would be a grand adventure...

QBBarzooMonkey September 7 2005 8:17 PM EDT

I'm hoping that maybe some potential contestants are taking their time, maybe, huh maybe? :)

Wonderpuff September 7 2005 8:21 PM EDT

We are, in fact taking our time :)

QBBast [Hidden Agenda] September 8 2005 2:48 AM EDT


Some of us don't even start getting creative 'til after midnight. Best wishes to Mrs. Monkey.

QBBarzooMonkey September 8 2005 9:12 AM EDT

Thank you Bast, that was very nice of you :)

QBBarzooMonkey September 10 2005 1:35 PM EDT

Okay, I finally did the math - the Grand Prize altogether is more than 5.5 mil NW.

And if anyone is wondering, Mrs. Monkey's surgery is postponed until after she gets a new cat-scan - the surgeon found something during pre-op that has him concerned - he's hoping it's just a benign cyst, as opposed to a tumor, but he won't operate until he knows. If it turns out badly, my CB2 days may be numbered, but we're hoping against hope, like we always do :)

Unwanted Memories September 10 2005 3:46 PM EDT

come on everyone, i don't want to be the only constestant... :) well never mind i do, i can deal with 5.5 mill nw stuff !

Unwanted Memories September 10 2005 3:48 PM EDT

I apologize, for that, she likes to mess around with the computer when i go on smoke breaks,

Mistress Reyna September 10 2005 4:23 PM EDT

Okay, ive been yelled at, iv'e also been told i need to say sorry to barzoo, or Al would quit cb. So Barzoo im sorry for posting outside of my Account name and causing any confusion if any was created cause of this... p.s he's a meany! ^.^

Grim Reaper September 10 2005 6:00 PM EDT

lol

QBBarzooMonkey September 12 2005 11:25 AM EDT

More than 5.5 mil NW in prizes, 6 days to enter, with just over 24 hours left, and only one entry? C'mon! How big a loser must I be? :P

Stephen Young September 12 2005 12:19 PM EDT

If I can remember (busy right now) I'll try to enter tonight.

{CB3}-HR22 September 12 2005 3:37 PM EDT

This is a very hard and weird topic to write about..
Otherwise I would submit one.

WeaponX September 12 2005 6:11 PM EDT

The War Begins

Shamus Jon sulked into the room trying very hard to hide his limp and says "am i late" in a gruff voice. Apollo says "yes but that is not a problem" The chocolate mutters in a low voice " just like that breed to be late." Shamus Jon sits down to rest his injured leg. Apollo says "i guess i will state our buisness again. we are here to discuss the growing threat of BarzooMonkey and his band of pupnappers. The chocolate says " i do not see an alternative to going to war. with Shamus Jon as our general i think we will be a force." Shamus Jon looked down at his leg and looked around the room. Sensei Boopadoo sees Shamus Jon looking uneasy and says " i think i have to say it if Shamus does not. The chocolate as if waiting for this moment tries to hide a smirk on his face. Boopadoo continues " in his last battle" just then Shamus says "I will lead the troups. i just need a few weeks to wrap up my buissness in my kingdom." they all nod in agreement except The chocolate who has a disgusted look on his face. Apollo turns to look at The chocolate and just as he is about to say something, a loud tapping is heard by all and suddenly the door swings open and a large monkey holding a spear stands at the door. The enchantress silent until now screams as she sees what looks to be hundreds of thousands of monkeys lined up. The chocolate barks " the war is now!!!"...

i know it is not exactly what you were looking for but tell me it wasn't entertaining? please tell me if this was a valid entry.

Xiaz on Hiatus September 12 2005 9:57 PM EDT

Call to Arms.

A shroud of silence settled upon the large courtroom, Shamus Jon limped towards the long table, a dog who had seen stared death in the face during his years of service to The Cause. No one heard the muiltcoloured ball roll of the table, stunned by the presence of the War Hero, Shamus Jon. Prince Apollo stood abruptly, steadying himself and settling his nerves, "Welcome Sir Shamus Jon" he said diligently.

Shamus Jon made no reply, making a glare of recognition towards the prince. He limped towards the vacant seat, maintaining his sure movements yet his wound ached, rest was calling. "I apologise to all for my lateness, my endurance and speed has forsaken me after all these years," he explained as he sat, the old chair made not a creek. "You have no reason to apologise, Brother, maybe the Prince could have given us an earlier call, seeing as the trouble has been imminent for quite some time," Sensei Boopadoo mocked, glancing towards the Prince. Jack The Bear sprang forth from his seat, "Dare not mock the Prince!" he warned defensively. Apollo waved down the CockerSpaniel Gaurd, "My dear Sensei is indeed correct in his comment, the trouble in the Southlands has been brewing for quite some time," he paused impressed by his composure he continued, "Welcome Shamus, I am honoured you could join us on such short notice, I doubt your days of strength have run out, seeing as no normal mut could have made it in time." "Lets leave the empty words, I have come as you requested of me, to discuss the issue at hand. I can see the situation must be serious, the presence of our company is a rare event indeed," Shamus Jon replied, noting all who were present at the table.

The Labrador Ambassador clears his throat, as he straightened in his seat, "As usual you speak the truth, Warrior King, in the pass months our scouts have reported that Simian forces have increased in number and have been terrorizing the Hound of the Southlands," he spoke with a strong Labradorian accent. Totally aware of the company in his presence he has chose his words carefully, the unity of all thier forces would be neccessary to fight the latest threat.

That's all I got now, but may add more if the comp doesn't end yet ;)

QBBarzooMonkey September 12 2005 10:57 PM EDT

Okay! Since some interest is finally being shown, I'm going to extend the submission deadline from tomorrow at noon to Thursday at noon (server time).
Thanks, guys! :)

Xiaz on Hiatus September 13 2005 10:29 PM EDT

Call to Arms.- extended.

A shroud of silence settled upon the large courtroom, Shamus Jon limped towards the long table, a dog who’d seen stared death in the face during his years of service to The Cause. No one heard the multicoloured ball roll of the table, stunned by the presence of the War Hero, Shamus Jon. Prince Apollo stood abruptly, steadying himself and settling his nerves, "Welcome Sir Shamus Jon" he said diligently.

Shamus Jon made no reply, making a glare of recognition towards the prince. He limped towards the vacant seat, maintaining his sure movements yet his wound ached, rest was calling. "I apologise to all for my lateness, my endurance and speed has forsaken me after all these years," he explained as he sat, the old chair made not a creek. "You have no reason to apologise, Brother, maybe the Prince could have given us an earlier call, seeing as the trouble has been imminent for quite some time," Sensei Boopadoo mocked, glancing towards the Prince. Jack the Bear sprang forth from his seat, "Dare not mock the Prince!" he warned defensively. Apollo waved down the Cocker Spaniel Guard, "My dear Sensei is indeed correct in his comment, the trouble in the Southlands has been brewing for quite some time," he paused impressed by his composure he continued, "Welcome Shamus, I am honoured you could join us on such short notice, I doubt your days of strength have run out, seeing as no normal mutt could have made it in time." "Lets leave the empty words, I have come as you requested of me, to discuss the issue at hand. I can see the situation must be serious, the presence of our company is a rare event indeed," Shamus Jon replied, noting all who were present at the table.

The Labrador Ambassador clears his throat, as he straightened in his seat, "As usual you speak the truth, Warrior King, in the pass months our scouts have reported that Simian forces have increased in number and have been terrorizing the Hound of the Southlands," he spoke with a strong Labradorian accent. Totally aware of the company in his presence he has chose his words carefully; the unity of all their forces would be necessary to fight the latest threat. A small side door opened and Terrier servants walked in carrying wine and bread. The Ambassador continued, “I’m sure you are all aware that this disturbance has shown its ugly head before, but this time it seems, our old friend Wolf Blood BarzooMonkey has returned from his quests to the east,” Princess Regan WonderDog FluffyTail looked concerned, as did a few others at the table. “As Prince Apollo has explained, his raids on the Southlands have been most horrid, our humble farm lands have been looted, and the farmer and their pups and wives slaughter. No one spared from their steel or sword,” he added.

Shamus Jon took a sip of the wine, the Enchantress waved her tale at him, but he paid no attention. He spoke, “It is most unfortunate, for any lives to be lost, let alone the innocent. That BarzooMonkey is trying to force our hands into combat; his recent adventures have indeed increased his cunningness. I suppose you have not sent any of the Sentry down to protect the lands?” He swung his legendary Blade of Truth upon the table; its aura was awe inspiring. “Unfortunately the roads to the South has been littered with ambush parties, my dear Shamus Jon, know that I have tried everything within my power to help the poor folk,” Apollo sincerely explained, he had indeed tried his best, but even his highly trained Sentry were falling pray to the Wolves of Borzoo. His continued before the others could speak, “It is from this I have sensed that the Wolves are planning on using the route to launch attacks further North. This is why I have called upon all of you assistance, as my late father Zeus the Speed Paw, has helped you in the Days of Chaos, I hope you will help me to protect his empire.”

“Your father was a most great dog, I’m sure everyone here remembers his deeds,” Chocolate wisely said…

Mistress Reyna September 13 2005 11:23 PM EDT

Barzoo, you not a loser hun, its just that storys are hard to come up with its good to see otherpeople entered though i didnt wanna win by default Goopd Luck everybody!!!!!!

Stephen Young September 14 2005 12:37 PM EDT

Here we go. I'm going to try the chapter 2 later today.

Chapter 1: Pads of Iron (continuation)

Shamus Jon closed the massive hall doors to stop the dreadful flow of the accursed fog from filtering into the room. He treaded carefully towards the meeting table where he took his seat, thankful to be relieved of the weight on his throbbing paw.

"What a dreadful morning we have here, friends," Jon muttered.

Princess Regan WonderDog FluffyTail agreed with Shamus Jon, but she was in no mood for idle banter about the weather. "I think we should begin," she barked curtly, and with that the hall fell silent. Prince Apollo rolled his ball slowly between each paw before finally addressing the small council.

"As I have already discussed, the BarzooMonkey king has advanced his Simian raids to the southern reaches of Cockerspania. These trespasses cannot be ignored."

Shamus Jon's ears pricked forward at the news. "I know that the BarzooMonkey king does not hold our kind as allies, but what could possibly interest him in invading these Canine lands?"

"Does it matter!?" howled Jack the Bear. "The few defensive outposts in the south have been decimated by these raids, and I'm not going to allow the blood of another Spaniel Guard or Cocker pup taint my paws while we sit here pondering the intentions of that wretched beast!"

"Do not confuse my brother's words as a request for inaction, Jack. The truth is all he seeks," Sensei Boopadoo calmly stated, then turned his attention toward the Prince. "To silence this threat, we must be aware of the Simian King's motives. To press forward blindly may prove to be a grave blunder. Do we have any clue what motivates these raids?"

Shamus Jon's paw began to throb painfully. The merciless fog had seeped its way past the doors and through the cracks in the floor, eerily whisping along the expanse of the room. Apollo glanced solemnly at the Grand Duchy of Labrador. Discarding his usual quieted tone, the Chocolate Lab broke his silence at last:

"We cannot be certain, but our Retrievers have intercepted broken reports that the BarzooMonkey king has joined forces with the Reptilian Hordes from the Central Mountains." He waited a moment to allow this information to be digested before continuing. "All missives sent to query the Reptilian Chieftain, JuJuLizard Rex, have not been answered."

"Well," replied King Shamus Jon, "if this is true, it could mean that the BarzooMonkey king has finally decided to lay claim to the legendary Golden Collar, and the grave consequences caused by unleashing it must be prevented."

"Impossible!" cried Princess WonderDog. "The Simian king cannot possibly place his monkey paws on the Collar. He knows what would happen to him--the prophecy has foretold this! It is leashed in Poodle City where it will remain!"

Sensei Boopadoo caressed the Princess' fur to ease her distress. "This is true, my princess, but JuJuLizard Rex is motivated by greed. If the BarzooMonkey king has somehow garnered his allegiance, you can be certain that the he will disregard the curse of the prophecy for the right price."

"Then it is settled!" wolfed Jack the Bear. "Shamus Jon, Sensei Boopadoo, Princess Regan WonderDog FluffyTail, and I will head south as soon as possible. We must intercept this threat before it becomes more than we can..."

"Agreed," interrupted Prince Apollo, "but we must also fortify Poodle City. I will mobilize the Spaniel Royal Guard and protect the Collar myself. If these monkey monsters make it past the..."

A great howl erupted from outside, followed by the splintering crash of the massive doors as they slammed to the floor. The sickly fog poured into the room, disguising the shadowy figure that now loomed in the entrance. Jack the Bear could smell the stink of the creature well before it leapt forward.

"A Simian Assassin!" he yelped, diving over the table towards the creature. Shamus' paw wrenched painfully as he stood, slowing his defensive instincts. Prince Apollo and the Grand Duchy were too far from the door to respond quickly enough, and the baboonish creature lunged toward the Princess, howling ferociously and barring its fangs.

Before Shamus Jon could process the next few moments, the threat was eliminated. Sensei Boopadoo was standing over the creature with a single paw on its steaming neck.

It was dead.

Apollo stared blankly ant the creature, then at Boopadoo, the words of the Grand Duchy repeating through his mind:

"...do not be fooled by his small stature, for legend has it that he possesses the secret of the PADS of IRON..."

(without the title, word count: 749)

QBBarzooMonkey September 15 2005 12:04 PM EDT

Okay! This contest is officially closed and into the judging phase! Thanks for the entries, everyone, and stayed tuned for the winner(s) announcement. :)

Stephen Young September 15 2005 1:36 PM EDT

Drat! I just started working on the second part. Oh well, Good Luck everyone!

WeaponX September 15 2005 8:57 PM EDT

the suspense is killing me :)

QBBarzooMonkey September 15 2005 9:16 PM EDT

Well, it's time. I printed out all the entries, and gave them to the dogs to pick their favori - no, just kidding!
First, I'd like to thank BrandonLP, Mrs. Lizard (my wife and co-owner of Regan The WonderDog), my mother-in-law (a retired teacher and owner of Jack The Bear), and sister-in-law (owner of Shamus Jon and Boopadoo) for helping me judge. All voting was unanimous, and the first runner-up is:

FordPrefect
Congratulations! When the next new supporter item is announced, I will be obtaining it for you.

And now, again by unanimous vote, the winner is:

QBBarzooMonkey September 15 2005 9:21 PM EDT

JuJuLizard Rex (The Wonka Factory) 69.160.24.246 [USA]Vampire King (The Last Samurai) 1,036 Slayer Arrows ($10222) 9:17 PM EDT

JuJuLizard Rex (The Wonka Factory) 69.160.24.246 [USA]Vampire King (The Last Samurai) Ursus horribilis ($4140205) 9:17 PM EDT
The biggest, baddest Ex Sword in the game.

JuJuLizard Rex (The Wonka Factory) 69.160.24.246 [USA]Vampire King (The Last Samurai) The Cobra's Venom ($1413862) 9:17 PM EDT
A very respectable, named Compound Bow

Congratulations, and excellent job! (and I hope the prize is worth the effort)! :)

QBBarzooMonkey September 15 2005 9:27 PM EDT

A sincere thanks to everyone who participated, and watch out for an announcement related to and based on this contest in the very near future!

Xiaz on Hiatus September 16 2005 2:59 AM EDT

That's great, thanks a lot JuJu :) - always like a decent contest.

Stephen Young September 16 2005 9:24 AM EDT

Congrats to Ford, and thanks to JuJu(Barzoo)! I had a good time writing for this story.

Mistress Reyna September 16 2005 3:52 PM EDT

Congrats hun :)
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