Love Song Writing Contest (in Contests)


QBJohnnywas September 1 2006 5:44 PM EDT

It's my wedding anniversary this weekend. I've been married a year now and it's fantastic! So to mark the occasion I'm holding a contest. What I want is a love lyric ( a poem will also be accepted, so long as it's sort of in a song verse/chorus framework).

Now, maybe I'm biting off more than I can chew here, but the prize will be a finished song: I will set the lyric/poem to music and record it. The finished item will be posted on my band's myspace page for download.

(www.myspace/tivoliband.com)

I will also be putting together a cash prize, so donations to the contest are welcome!


The closing date for this will be Friday 8th September and the winner will be the one that moves/inspires me most. I will say though, that if I'm very inspired there may be more than one winner...

Not many rules: Your entry must be PG and must fit (if loosely) into a song framework - so keep it within about three or four verses and a chorus.


One more thing: I'm afraid I don't take requests for a particular style - tunes come out as they come out - so anything I do will be in my style. Apologies in advance if any winner's song is not to your taste!

Come on now, inspire me! Get writing you romantics!

QBJohnnywas September 1 2006 5:47 PM EDT

If you make any donations send them to my char Scratched Telecaster.

And be warned the finished article may take a couple of weeks to finish.......

Flamey September 1 2006 5:51 PM EDT

not that I'm entering but you did the website wrong.

it should be www.myspace.com/tivoliband

QBJohnnywas September 1 2006 5:53 PM EDT

Yup, it's late! I'm tired...ok, I'm a little bit drunk! Thanks for that Flamey!

www.myspace.com/tivoliband


lol!

QBOddBird September 1 2006 5:56 PM EDT

Should we submit our songs within this thread, or may we e-mail/convey them to you in some other manner (it helps you win if you don't show everyone else your song ;))?

QBJohnnywas September 1 2006 6:00 PM EDT

Post them in this thread. One, it keeps them together in one place for me and two, one person's entry may inspire other people to write.

Or don't you want CB to see how romantic you can be? ;)

QBJohnnywas September 2 2006 5:49 PM EDT

Pot is sitting at 300k.

Slashundhack [We Forge Our Own Stuff] September 2 2006 6:02 PM EDT

Ain't wrote poetry in 20,25 years all ready made 3 aborted try's. Still tryin'.

Slashundhack [We Forge Our Own Stuff] September 2 2006 6:26 PM EDT

This isn't good but I'll break the ice... Lovin' you fer lovin' me Didn't know how happy I could be Was empty and all alone But I'm complete now we've made our home . Pleasant as a home can be dear It would be not without you here That's what I got considering I like mostly metal it's awful country. I wish I knew how to work this so it stayed in verses.

SBW September 2 2006 6:30 PM EDT

here's mine..


i love you.

QBBarzooMonkey September 2 2006 6:35 PM EDT

Here With Me

Verse:
I woke up this morning, and watched you sleeping
And my world's in its proper place
Morning's first light dances in your hair
And lays its warm kiss on your face

Is it possible I could love you even more at this moment,
Than I loved you when we went to sleep?
Or three times as much as the day before that?
Or a million times more than last week?

Chorus:
Is it luck? Am I blessed? I search for the reason,
But reason's nowhere to be seen.
I'm not sure I deserve it, could I still be dreaming?
Another day, and there you are, here with me.

Verse:
It's not like I try hard to make you love me,
And loving someone like you is so right
Yet here you are, with me, with me and no one else
Together we greet morning's light

Chorus

Bridge:
We met in a daze
Our wedding day was a blur
How happy can two people be?
The Honeymoon's not near over
And it may never end
All because you're still here, here with me.

Chorus X2

tscm September 2 2006 8:24 PM EDT

Awwwwww.

Slashundhack [We Forge Our Own Stuff] September 2 2006 10:12 PM EDT

How many monkeys jamin' on typewriters did that take barzoo?GOOD. I was going to put another in "Just" marginally better than the first one but maybe not now.

Slashundhack [We Forge Our Own Stuff] September 3 2006 12:44 AM EDT

Well this is garbage compared to barzoos but I like one of the lines maybe you can use some of it sometime. verse ,Surronded by the fantasy of your love, Mangled by the worry of it ending, You are the dream I dream of, Tangled entangled held unbending, Chorus, I dream I dream of you, I pray you remain true, I dream I dream of you, Worry, it makes me blue.

QBJohnnywas September 3 2006 5:38 AM EDT

I'm liking what I've got so far but a little hint to maybe increase the entries, maybe help those who haven't got somebody....love songs don't have to be happy...... ;)

Maelstrom September 3 2006 1:05 PM EDT

Great music, Johnny! I love the bass, synths and vocals. And that cool, retro, garage band sound ;)

"Tony Won't Go" sounds to me to be influenced by Joy Division - good job :)

Get some more songs on there!

QBBarzooMonkey September 3 2006 4:52 PM EDT

You asked for it:

Here With Me, Part II

Verse:
I woke up this morning, and watched you sleeping
And my world's all out of place
Morning's first light shows how frail you've become
And accents the pain in your face

Is it possible I could love you even more at this moment,
Than I loved you when we went to sleep?
Or three times as much as the day before that?
Or a million times more than last week?

Chorus:
Were we bad? Done some wrong? I search for the reason,
But reason's nowhere to be seen.
You just don't deserve it, I don't know how to go on
Why can't you stay a little longer, here with me.

Verse:
We've known for a while that this day would come,
All that's left to be said came last night
I'm just happy we have this, so just one last time
Together we greet morning's light

Chorus

Bridge:
We met in a daze
Our wedding day was a blur
How happy could two people be?
Til death do us part
Shouldn't happen so fast
Please just stay a little longer, here with me.

Chorus X2

The Pope [Serenity In Chaos] September 3 2006 11:23 PM EDT

People say I do what's right
So if I feel your worth a fight
It must be right.

(Chorus)
As we dance this endless dance of love
we float on wings of weightless doves
we dance to note less tunes
writen in unknown runes

I saw you smile in a thought
It's an image I have often sought
It's me only perfect thought.

I hear you laugh in my ears
It clears away all my fears
It must be you in my ears.

I made it there in a dream
You had a special little beam
Even if it's just a dream

(Chorus)
As we dance this endless dance of love
we float on wings of weightless doves
we dance to note less tunes
writen in unknown runes

I won't let this end
This love I won't amend
Cause I won't let this ever end

It's not the best thing ever writen, but i'll give it a shot to win some stuff....

QBJohnnywas September 4 2006 7:59 AM EDT

The pot is sitting at 470k.

Flamey September 4 2006 8:06 AM EDT

Johnny i don't think you can read :P

it sits at 500k, you silly boy.

Flamey (Flâmêy) 220.245.178.139 Johnnywas(Angle Of Deaf)
(Scratched Telecaster) $30000 -- donation!!!!!!!!!!!! 8:05 AM EDT

QBJohnnywas September 4 2006 8:07 AM EDT

Thanks for that. A nice round number! :)

Slashundhack [We Forge Our Own Stuff] September 4 2006 11:19 AM EDT

Truth be known she ain't much to look at, Her breath smells of old socks and a world of pain, Takes after her mother who looked like a land bat, All my friends look at her with nothing but distain. chorus,, But ya know I love her dear, Ya still am happy to curb my beer, Cause my love is an English bulldog, And her love it keeps me clear,...........Ah honeyed country seems to work best for me that way any ways.

QBJohnnywas September 5 2006 3:35 AM EDT

Come on people write me some more...my plectrum is twitching.....

BadFish September 5 2006 9:29 AM EDT

loooooovin you.... is easy cuz your beautiful. doop doopa dee doo... WAH! WAH! WAAAAAAH......

QBSefton [Black Cheetah Bazaar] September 5 2006 11:34 AM EDT

I will always have love for you

I fall in love all over again, everytime I see her smile
No matter what life may toss at me, she makes everything seem worthwhile
I never knew I would be able to have someone like her for so long,
And the only way I can think to thank her, is to do it in a song

She is the constant companion of my heart, the co-pilot of my life,
The smartest thing I ever did, was ask to her to be my wife.
She never asks for fancy things, a simple flower brightens her day
She guides me through the treacherous waters, a beacon on my way

[chorus]
So thank you my love, for all you give
you are the reason that I live
There is only one thing you ever need to do
and that simple thing is just you knowing
I will always have love for you

I will always be there to pick her up, protect her from all harm
Her wit, personality, and loveliness, her ever subtle charm
Brings joy to a world that can be cruel, that tries to bring me down
Because she stands besides me, there are no tears within this clown

She is the end all be all of every woman on this spinning ball
I will always there to catch her, everytime I see her fall
She makes the shadows of the night, retreat like melting snow
She makes everything seem all right when the cold winds blow

[chorus]
So thank you my love for all you give
you are the reason that I live
There is only one thing you ever need to do
and that simple thing is just you knowing
I will always have love for you

I never knew what I did, to deserve a woman like her
But I do know this one thing, this thing I know for sure
She is the one that I love, with all my heart can hold
Her beauty is more precious than the biggest bar of gold

She ask so little of me, I almost feel it is never enough
To tell her how much I truly love her, a diamond in the rough
No other woman compares to her, she rises up above
So to her I will pledge, my never dieing love,


[bridge]
She is the only woman, I will ever need to see
She is the only woman, that seems to complete me
She is the only woman, that makes my heart sing
She is the only woman, that has that certain thing

She is the only woman, I ever want to know
She is the only woman, that makes my heart glow
She is the only woman, I want by my side
She is the only woman, coming along for the ride

As we sing the song of life, together hand in hand
I know that I will always be her ever loving man
And I know that her love, will always be strong and true
And I know no easier words to say, than simple I love you

I sing this song of praise, and sing it with my soul
She never knows how much she means to me, but this is my song's goal
So my love, my shining bright, my everything and my all
Let us walk together forever, my love song's heart felt call

[chorus]
So thank you my love for all you give
you are the reason that I live
There is only one thing you ever need to do
and that simple thing is just you knowing
I will always have love for you

I will always have love for you
I will always have love for you

QBSefton [Black Cheetah Bazaar] September 5 2006 4:15 PM EDT

OK I totally blame Johnnywas for this. As I spun ideas for a song in my head, this kept spilling out and getting in the way. Since I have no other place to deposit it, I deposit it here, or it will never go away. I have no idea if you could make it a song, but I think it is a better poem.

This Rose

Red rose, red rose, come hither to,
for in your thorny stem profess
I plucked you from the solid ground
denying nature's bountied quest.

Red rose, red rose, please do not weep,
you petals on the ground I tread,
For in your dieing gasping breath,
my love for her grows within its stead

Oh flower Oh Joy Oh Spring
with buds a-burstin and birds that sing
Oh night Oh stars Oh endless sky
A girl whose beauty does not lie

Red rose, red rose, ask not from me,
with your accusing leaves a-whither
I did what I thought I must do
a bouquet for my love I must gather

Red rose, red rose, I shed a tear,
But not for the loss of your sweet mother
I shed my tear for all to see,
I shed my tear for yet another

Oh smile, oh love, oh flame
I gathered this with not a shame
Oh sight, oh life, oh woman true
I gathered this rose just for you

wldflr September 5 2006 6:45 PM EDT

/me weeps :)

Maelstrom September 5 2006 6:54 PM EDT

Sefton... ... ... that's really good! I'm normally not very moved by poetry - especially the stuff posted on CB ;) - but that's definitely an exception! :D

I can imagine it sung as sort of a soft ballad. For some reason it reminds me of songs by Current 93...

QBJohnnywas September 6 2006 2:57 PM EDT

la lala la la la.....

QBJohnnywas September 8 2006 12:33 PM EDT

I'm letting this run for a few days more, just incase there are any more entries out there.

:)

deifeln September 8 2006 4:13 PM EDT

Who's the wild Egyptian goddess
That's a baby's momma to all my chicks?
BAST!
Ya [darn] right!
Who is the woman that would risk her neck
For her brother man?
BAST!
Can you dig it?
Who's the cat that won't cop out
When there's danger all about?
BAST!
Right On!
They say this cat Bast is a bad mother
SHUT YOUR MOUTH!
I'm talkin' 'bout Bast.
THEN WE CAN DIG IT!
She's a complicated woman
But no one understands her but deifeln
QB BAST!

QBJohnnywas September 8 2006 4:18 PM EDT

Oh that would be a moment of pure pop genius were I to record a version of that one...I'm sorely tempted.....and I'm not joking......

deifeln September 8 2006 4:19 PM EDT

Do I win?

QBJohnnywas September 8 2006 4:35 PM EDT

I'm not sure 'win' would be quite the word for it....lol.....

Slashundhack [We Forge Our Own Stuff] September 8 2006 5:43 PM EDT

Man you have to do it even if only by your self into your comp.

QBJohnnywas September 10 2006 10:07 AM EDT

letting this run a little longer....

Slashundhack [We Forge Our Own Stuff] September 10 2006 2:35 PM EDT

daddy?daddy? DADDY!

RaptorX September 11 2006 10:10 PM EDT

‘Angel’

Vs1;
Though the years fall like sand
We still walk hand in hand
And I look into your eyes and smile.
We’re two hearts that beat together
And I’m still crazy as a Hatter,
Deep in love, with you -- my Angel.

Chorus;
Angel – you bring sunshine to the morning
Oh, Angel - just to look at you each day.
Oh, Angel –And I know it will always be;
– You’re my Angel.

Vs2;
We are different in so many ways –
I see your beauty and I’m lost in a haze
– just gazing – at you.
I can almost see forever
each moment we’re together.
and I know, you are sent from heaven - my Angel

Chorus:
Angel – you bring sunshine to the morning
Oh, Angel - just to look at you each day.
Oh, Angel –And I know we will always be;
– You’re my Angel.

Bridge:
Oh sweet the kisses that you give to me.
What joy, to see you every day.
What love, I feel when I look into your eyes –
I feel the grace of God shining down upon me.
Your love rescues me--
You are my love, my life, my Angel.

Chorus:
Angel – you bring sunshine to the morning
Oh, Angel - just to look at you each day.
Oh, Angel –And I know we will always be; because
– You’re my Angel.


Written today, September 11, 2006
By Glenn Marble

RaptorX September 12 2006 8:26 PM EDT

optional chorus:
( though I guess it depends how the music fits - but the old one doesn't fit the melody in my head today - plus the rescues line doesn't really fit where it was - I like this better)

Angel - you bring sunshine to the morning
- just to look at you each day.
Angel - With each new bruise and bump I face,
you simply kiss the pain away.
Your love rescues me - You're my Angel.

So is my entry too late? Do I still get a prize? Does anyone like it?

QBJohnnywas September 13 2006 1:47 AM EDT

This is still on, mostly because I've been to busy to pick up my guitar for the last couple of days!

Slashundhack [We Forge Our Own Stuff] September 15 2006 4:30 PM EDT

Well I got 2nd who got the other spots??Thanks loads made my day.
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