Battle of Alatar... Finish? Contest! (in Contests)


{CB1}Lukeyman November 24 2006 10:58 PM EST

The Contest: Finish my story. Simple as that. I want a minimum of 2 more chapters, and make the chapters sort of long.
Don't worry, this is not another homework thing :p I just think this story deserves an ending.. a good one.
The Prize: First prize gets basically everything I own. Exept the named Katana, and my character. Other than those.. you get it!

I will choose a winner at the end of the month, hopefully i get at least a few submissions by then.

Thanks to everyone who have read my story and thanks to everyone who enters.

Good Luck!

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Prologue
The year is 1868, the Battle of Alatar is upon the lands of Ecthelion. There is a man, some say he is a sadistic man, others say he is a superior being, but all that is known of him for sure, is that he wants the people of Durin to lose the war, and perish, by stealing their weapons and armor. Only one man will be able to stand in the way of this super power. Only one man will be able to re-unite the forces of Ecthelion. Only one man... will be able to make a mean bowl of chili.


Chapter 1
There were three things the shaggy haired boy knew. War, Love, and Hope. You see, This young man lived in a time of war, when people didn't just live on farms and had a good time living life, they fought, hundreds of battles each and everyday, to show that they were number one.

One day, while our hero, Red, was inside making chili for him and his father, he heard some gun shots outside the door. He stopped the soup and ran out, and just as he got out, he saw his father, Blue, lying on the ground with a blood stained shirt on. "R..r..red.....come.....here....", his father whispered, "I want you to take my gun, and my horse, and stop Jonathan, he..*Cough*.. he is stealing all the weapons of the people, *Cough*.. so that we will lose the Battle of Alatar.", Red vowed on his father that he would get revenge on Jonathan and his evil minions.

Red set off, on his fathers horse, Seran, and began riding off into the horizon, with no knowledge about what adventures, foes and friends alike he was soon to encounter.


Chapter 2
As our faithful hero, Red, soon discovered, it wasn't easy surviving out on your own. He was thirsty and hungry after his first day of travelling, his horse, Seran, was tired, and wouldn't go any further. Red saw a little village over the hill, and decided it would be best to stop there for a little and have a rest.

He went into the village, and found no one out on the streets, it was a bring and beautiful morning, why wouldn't anyone be out on such a fine day such as this? thought Red. He got off his horse, and cautiously walked around by each house, looking for any sign of life. He thought he heard something inside a barrel across the road. Weapon drawn, and crouching down, he crept over the the barrel, and pushed off the top, and a man jumped out and startled him. "Hey, watch it!", said the strang man. "Who are you?", asked Red, "And what are you doing in a barrel?" The man said that his name was Dark, and he was in the barrel because he was hiding. "Hiding from what?", asked Red. "From the Memonites", replied Dark. "Who are they?", "They are the most ruthless killers in the world, they are mercenaries, killing for money. They are led by a powerful killer, Mem, he has a pet dragon that can kill a man with a bite.", "Wow, sounds really bad, where are they at?", "They never stay in one place, they are always on the move, looking for more people to kill, they wipped out everyone in this town, and Mem's Dragon, IA, ate all the bodies, that what it does, devours all the bodies the Memonites kill.", "Thats just disgusting." said Red. "Well, I'm going to keep travelling, I'm going to stop Jonathan, and end this War.", "Could I come with you?", asked Dark. "Can you weild a sword?", "No, I'm an archer, I have my bow and arrows in the barrel." He looked in the barrel for a second, and took out his bow and arrows, and off Red and Dark went, to unknown enimies.


Chapter 3
Our relentless hero, Red, and his new found friend, Dark, travel along the root filled trail in The Woods of Klinik. They were walking for quite a long time, until Dark piped up and said, "I'm hungry, can we try to find something to eat?", "Yeah sure, there should be some animals around these parts.", Red replied. "Hey, whats that over there?", asked Dark as he pointed over to a moving bushlike thing. "Don't know, lets see if we can catch it!". Red and Dark slowly moved over, hiding behind trees and boulders, they got close to the creature and drew their weapons. The creature turned around and faced them, Red began to put his sword back as he saw the cute little face of the ceature, and just as he was about to say, it's ok, to Dark, he fired an arrow at the creature, and the creature, with surprising quickness, dodged the arrow, and lunged at Red's neck. Dark jumped in frightfullness and said, "Watch out Re....", but before he could finish, the creatures head was already hitting the ground, blood dripping off Red's sword, he said that it was ok, and that they should keep on moving, things weren't as they seemed in this forest.

As they continued their quest in the forest, they came upon a girl, sitting alone in the woods. Red rushed over to ask her if she needed any help. As he turned her over, he saw that she had no face, and she felt really dry. All of a sudden, Red felt a sharp pain in his arm and Dark jumped up as he heard the gun shot. They heard a loud buff voice that said, "Hold your fire!", and Red, trying to fight the pain, lay on his back, shocked by the sudden pain. The man came over, and Red, with his eyes beginning to close, saw Dark's face, and another man beside him.


Chapter 4
Red began gaining conciousness and he slowly opened up his eyes and saw a pair of crystal blue eyes gazing into his. He jumped back in surprise and fell off of the table onto the cold hard floor. He got up and took in his surroundings, he seemed to be in a room, with a candle and a women was standing over the table from which he fell off of.

"Hello, how are you feeling?", asked the strange women.

"Ok, I guess", replied Red, as he was getting up off the floor. "Where am I?"

"You are at the Kingdom of Elmoth, ruled by my father, Th00p. I am Desy, the princess of Elmoth."

"Wait, where is my friend, Dark?"

"Don't worry, he is down in the kitchens, eating all of the food he can find, Rufen is down there now, trying to contain him."

"Well, thank you so much Desy, for you kindness and hospitality, but I must be on my way, I am trying to stop Jonathan, and this war we are all in."

"That is very noble of you, but please, stay for a little longer, I wish to be in your presence a little longer. Come, let us go to the kitchens to join your friend to something to eat, you must be famished."

As they got down to the kitchens, they heard pots and pans clanging around, and Dark came running out of the room, with Rufen in his wake, flailing a pot at Dark and yelling to get out of his kitchen.

"Red, your awake finally, come and try some of the food here, it's amazing!", said Dark.

"Rufen, that's enough. Could you make some Eggs and Bacon for our guests here?", asked Desy.

"Chure ting m'lady.", said Rufen, and he turned and into the kitchen he went.

Red, Desy, and Dark went over to the tables and sat down to talk while their food was being made. They began small chat, and then a big man, someone who looked familiar to Red, came and sat down beside him,and slapped him on the back.

"Feeling better I see, eh young one?", said the man.

"Oh, this is Sir Leon, the man who brought you here.", said Desy, "He is my fathers best fighter."

"Yes, sorry about the bullet, you were in our firing range, and one of my shooters, Edyit, thought you were the dummy, and took a shot. Good thing he's not that good eh? Haha."

"Yeah.", replied Red, "Good thing. By the way, who was that girl lying in the woods?"

"A girl.... Oh, you mean the dummy, yes, that was one of our dummies you must have seen."

Rufen then entered with a big plate of Eggs and Canadian Bacon. Red and Dark started drooling at the sight of it, and as they began to eat, they were jolted up and out of their hypnotized hunger, as a horn began sounding.

"Up, lets go princess to your chambers, you two, come along! Now!", boomed Sir Leon as he pulled them out of their seats.

"Whats happening?", asked Dark.

"That horn means someones in the kingdom thats not supposed to be in here."

As they got to the princess' chamber, Sir Leon put them in there, checked the room, and closed the door and ran off.

Red saw his sword in the corner of the room and went over and grabbed it.

"I'm going out to help them, Dark, you stay here and look after the princess."

"Ok", said Desy, "But be careful, I don't want you to get hurt."

"I won't.", replied Red, and out he went.

Red went down the long hallway, and found Sir Leon.

"I'm helping you find this thing.", He said to Sir Leon.

"Ok, stay close with me, I don't want you getting hur...", said Sir Leon, but he droned off and fell to the ground.

Red looked down at him and saw a dart in the side of his neck. He heard laughing and looked down the hall and saw a man leaning against the wall, laughing at what he had done.

"Who are you?", asked Red.

"I am Scytale, part of the Memonites."

"What did you do to him?", asked Red, while looking around for help.

"Oh him? I just knocked him out for a few hours, hahaha, who are you?"

"I am Red, Son of Blue, and you and all your Memonites are going to fall under my sword."

"Hahaha, is that so young man, well, lets see how good you are then."

He took out a Tulwar, and got ready to fight. Red took out his Katana and got in his fighting stance. Scytale started running towards Red, and Red began to run at his opponent, and their swords clashed in the middle, they began dualing, swords flying at eachother.

Red tripped on a stone, and slipped for a second, and Scytale, seeing his chance, went in close to Red to get a good stab in. Red, regaining his balance quickly saw scytale coming in close, and saw his chance. He side-stepped quickl and dodged the stab, and with that Scytale exposed his shoulder to Red's sword, and Red, with all his might, thrust his mighty weapon, deep into the flesh of Scytales shoulder.
Scytale stood still for a moment, shocked by this sudden blow, and then his eye's glazed over, and he slowly fell to the ground.


Chapter 5
Jonathan slapped Shade's face and sent him sprawling to the ground.
"I told you to take care of the kid too!", yelled Jonathan, "Now he is planning on coming to kill me!"
"B..b..but sir... he will stand no match for your great powers. Why must we kill him?", asked Shade.
"We must kill him because I said so!", boomed Jonathan, and as he spoke, the earth itself seemed to quiver at his mighty voice.
"Ok, but how do you propose I kill him sir?"
"I don't care how you kill him, just make sure you do it this time, and do it right!"
"Y..yes sir."
And with that, Shade went off to find the young man, Red, and kill him. But how...?

Red walked over to Sir Leon, who was still lying unconcious on the floor, and he took him by the arm, and carried him back down to the princess' chamber, where he found Desy and Dark, sitting down on the bed. Just as he entered, Desy got up and ran over to him and hugged him.
"Are you alright?", she asked, and let out a gasp as she saw Sir Leon. "Oh my goodness, what happened?"
"He'll be alright, he's just been drugged, but he'll be good in an hour or two. Are you alright?"
"Yes, yes, i'm fine. Come, let's go and see my father, he is probably looking for me."

Red put Sir Leon down on the bed and he, Desy, and Dark went off to see King Th00p. As they walked through the giant kingdom, Red was thinking about what he had ahead of him, Jonathan, Mem and his Memonites, he seemed to be getting more enemies then allies, and it was starting to frighten him. He was once a little boy, living with his father, taking life day by day, now, as he looks at his reflection in the fountain, he wonders how he ever became what he has become.
"Out with you!", cried the king, "How could a slimy Memonite get into my kingdom!"
Red saw a man stumble out of the room, and ran off mumbling to himself. They entered the Kings room and saw Th00p sitting back in his throne, and ordering people left and right to fix the security in his kingdom. He turned and saw his daughter and his face brightened up.
"Ahh, my beautiful princess, you are alright.", he said, "And who are these two young men? And where is Sir Leon?"
"Well daddy, this is Red, and Dark, Red just killed the Memonite that was in the kingdom."
"Ahh, very well done my boy, we could use a strapping young lad like yourself around here."
"Thank you sire, and your warrior, Sir Leon, got knocked out by that Memonite, he is currently in the princess chamber, he will be ok in an hour or so."
"Good good, come, let us feast, you must be starving after fighting that disgusting worm."
"Thank you."


Chapter 6
Mem stared out across his vast lands, the sun glinting off his black worn armor, watching his Memonites tare down houses and slaughter people to the ground. He walked though the blood filled streets of Hyrule Castle. Mem's brother, Mikel, walked over to him.
"Brother, we have captured the king, and slayed his servants, our men are now taking the gold from the coffers."
"Good Mikel, now, let us get away from these massacred streets and back to our home land."
Mem and his Memonites travelled back across the lands to his home land of Thuringwethil, while his pet dragon began devouring the rotting bodies in the castle.

Red and Dark sat at the table with Sir Leon, Th00p and Desy, and ate a wonderfully cooked meal. Steam was pouring off of the duck they ate, and the pie for dessert was seemingly prepared by culinary angels from heaven, with golden brown crust and suculant fillings. It was all so good, Red found it hard to leave behind.
"Your majesty, I am sorry, but myself and my friend Dark should be leaving your beautiful kingdom soon, we have a quest to finish, and cannot stay here for much longer.", said Red.
"Oh, well, that's too bad, I was hopeing you would stay for a little longer, but oh well, let me give you some provisions for your travelles.", replied King Th00p.
"Come you two, you can get ready to leave in my room, lets go.", said the princess.
So Red, Dark and Desy went off to her chambers to get ready to leave, while Rufen the cook prepared some meals for them to take with them.

When they got to her room, Sir Leon was gone to his chambers to have a little rest, and princess desy jumped on her bed and layed down. She told Dark he can go into the side room on her left and he can get washed up.
"I don't want you to leave Red.", said Desy.
"I know, but I must, I have to avenge my fathers death, and help all the people of Ecthelion through this war.", said Red.
"Take me with you, please, I can't stop thinking about you since I layed eyes upon your face, please, please take me with you on your journey."
"I couldn't risk you getting hurt, there are a lot of bad people out there, and they could get you, plus, your father would never allow that sort of thing."
"I can defend myself! Watch!" &nbspSo Red watched Desy sit on her bed, and she closed her eyes for a second.
"What is she doing?", Red thought to himself. And all of a sudden, a burst of flame came from her hands, and shot across the room.
"Wow! What was that?", ask Red with amazment.
"It's a fireball, my grandma taught it to me, it's an attack anchient warriors used to use."
"Well.... Ok, you can come along, but stay close to me, I do not want you getting hurt."
"Ok! I will get my stuff so we can leave, we will have to go down through my window, my dad would never allow me to go."
"Alright, but this is risky."
Dark came back, and Desy opened her window, and down the three friends climbed, off on their adventure together.

Jonathan took Bartjan by the throat and pushed him up agaisnt the wall.
"You mean to tell me, my slaves are planning on rebelling agaisnt me! How could you let this happen?!", said Jon.
"Yes oh mighty Jon, they say they do not like the way they are being treated."
"Why? I give them everything they need, work in the forges, buisnesses, their own public paper in which to sell and ask to buy things! What could they not like?!?"
"They do not like the way some of the higher ranked servants of yours are working in the public places, they say that you are being mean with all of your rules also.", cried Bartjan.
Jonathan threw Bartjan to the ground, with his other minion G_Beee lookin on. "Fine, they don't like it? Put a tax onto the public newspaper, tell them that everyone will have to pay double.. no wait, triple the normal ammount to sell something, muwhahaha, that otta show them.", demanded Jonathan, and with that, he stormed off into his lair.
Little did Jonathan know, there was a conspiracy in his own kingdom.


Chapter 7
Red, Dark and Desy set off on their journey towards Jonathan, they came up to a dark tunnel which went through a big mountain.
"Lets just go around.", said Dark
"No way!", replied Red, "We need to go through here to get to Jonathan quicker, it's just a little tunnel."
"Yeah, but it takes us out to Memonites Forest's.", said Dark.
"He's right Red, maybe we should go around?", questioned Desy.
"No, we should go through, if we don't we risk losing too much time and energy.", demanded Red.
So off the trio went, into the tunnel.

As they got a little ways into it, Red stopped them.
"Wait, I think I heard something."
"What is it?", whispered Dark.
"Shhhh."
A figure was coming towards them, and Red got into his fighting stance and said.
"Who are you?"
"It is Sir Leon, is that you Red?"
"Yes.", said Red as he sheathed his Katana.
"Sir Leon! Why have you followed us?", asked Desy.
"Sorry m'lady, I wish you accompany you, I do not want you to get harmed."
"Alright, come on you guys, lets keep moving, it's really dark in here." said Dark.

Once they were out of the tunnel, they sat down to eat some lunch by a river. Red took out his rucksack with the food in it, and they each had a hearty bowl of chilli.
"So where do we go now Red?", asked Dark, "Are you sure you want to go through the forest, The Memonites might find us!"
"Yes, we need to, no matter what the danger, I must find Jon and stop him!"
"Well, alright, lets do it Red, me and you!", said Dark.
"Wait! Don't forget about me and Sir Leon!" Desy announced.
"Alright alright!", said Red, "Let's just get going before it get's too dark.
Off they went, into The Memonites Forest. Not knowing what dangers were in store for them.

Red, Desy, Sir Leon and Dark were walking in the woods, when everything seemed to be going fine.
"It's really dark in here. Red.. I'm getting scared.", said Desy.
"It's ok Desy, just stay by me, i'll protect you.", replied Red.
"No princess, you should stay by me, I shall keep you safe.", said Sir Leon.
"It's ok you two, I can take care of myself. Hey Dark, you doing ok?", asked Desy. "Dark?... Dark?"
"Dark!?", called out Red.
"Uh oh, where is he?", asked Sir Leon.
"Daaaark?!?", cried out Red.

Mem was above the trees, scoping out the forest for some animal to eat as he stumbled upon some people walking through his forest.
"Well well well, what have we here?", Mem thought to himself.
He looked down and saw four people walking, and he got very angry that they were walking in his forest. He slowly followed behind them, and when the one at the back slowed down a pace, he jumped down, and snatched him up without a sound.
"Shhhhh", whispered Mem with a Dirk to his victims throat, "Not a sound unless you want another air hole."
"Who are you, and what are you doing in my woods?", asked Mem.
"I..I..I'm D..D...Dark, and me and my friends ar...are going to stop Jonathan from hurting the p..p.people of Ecthelion."
"Is that so, who are your friends?"
"Red, son of Blue, Desy, princess of Elmoth, and Sir Leon, the princess' protector."
"Ahhh, yes, I have heard of this, Red, one. There is quite a bounty on his head."
"I...I.....Is that so?"
"Yes, and I'm going to get him."
"Ha!", said Dark, "Good luck, Red's the best fighter ev--"
Before Dark could finish his sentence, Mem's dirk was through his throat and he was dead before he hit the forest floor, and Mem was off to find Red.

Red, Desy and Sir Leon were getting scared, Dark was gone, and they were lost in the woods. Red was trying to lead them, and keep up their hopes, but he himself was losing hope. Just then, A black figure jumped down from the tree tops and landed in front of them.
"So you are Red, eh?" said the figure.
"Yes, who are you?", asked Red as he unsheathed his Katana.
"Huh, Mem's the name, a wimpy little sword eh? Lets see if you can fight with it."
Mem took out his Black, blood stained Club, with dragon teeth coming out of it and prepared for a fight.
"Heh, nice club.", remarked Red, thinking that this was going to be easy, that club will slow him down so much.
But, do Red's horror, Mem jumped up, swinging the club like it was wind around his body, and stopped it right at Red's eye's.
"You ready punk?", asked Mem.
Red felt a little trickle down his leg, and decided it was now or never. He took a swing at Mem's stomach, but, to his dismay, Mem swung around too fast for him to follow, and before he knew it, there was a powerful blow to his right arm, and he felt something shatter. He dropped his Katana and fell to the ground. Mem took out his Dirk and held it to Red's throat.
"Too easy.", he said with a smirk.
Sir Leon dived at Mem to try and stop him, but before he even made contact with Mem, he had a dagger in his stomach, and began coughing up blood. He turned around and looked at the princess.
"Sorry... M'Lady.....", and Sir Leon exhaled his last breath.
Desy sit there shivering with fear, Mem held the blood drenched dirk in Red's face again, but before he could finish him off, an arrow flew through the air, and caught Mem in the arm. Mem, surprised and injured, took off in a flash to regain his composer.

Red felt the throbbing pain, and was on the vurge of passing out, when he saw someone come over him, and put their hand on his chest and he heard some muttered words, and as if by magic, he began feeling better.
"Who are you?", he asked the strange being.
"I am called, Pixel."


Chapter 8
Pixel pulled Red onto his feet, and walked over to a rock sitting on the ground and took a seat. He pulled out a water skin and had a drink.
"Here." He said as he tossed the skin over to Red.
"Thanks... Gross, what is this stuff?"
"It's called Columbian Juice; it revives you if you're really tired and weak."
"Cool."
Pixel walked over to Desy and asked her if she was ok.
"I think so." Said Desy.
"Here, let me check." Replied Pixel as he placed his hands on Desy's shoulders and closed his eyes.
"Oh!" Cried out Desy.
Red jumped in between then and unsheathed his Katana and pointed it at Pixels throat.
"Relax Red" Said Desy, "I liked it."
Red turned around and gave her a look, and turned away to speak with Pixel about what they were going to do next.
"So who are you anyway?" asked Red.
"My name is Pixel; I am an Enchanter from the fields of Jigorokano. Jonathan has destroyed my lands and killed all of my people, I am the only survivor I know of, and I fled to try to defeat Jonathan and his army."
"Alright well, thank you for saving us there. Will you join us to go and fight Jonathan?"
"Of course I will, let us get out of this forest first, come, follow me; I know a safe way out."
Red and Desy followed behind Pixel as he led them through the forest, and before long, they were out into what would usually be the crisp, clean air of Hyrule Castle, but instead smelled putrid of blood and rotting corpses.
"Oh..My..Goddness!" cried out Desy as she fell to the ground, the smell too strong for her.
Pixel mumbled a few words and a bubble formed around them.
"There we go; this will keep the smell out."
They walked down to the city, Red walking close with Desy because she did not wish to see the lifeless bodies on the blood stained streets. As they were walking, Red held up his hand in a motion to stop, and to get down. The three crouched down and Red took out his sword and began walking over to an overturned dumpster. He got closer and peered inside and what he saw frightened him, he turned away in an instant and fell to the ground.

King Th00p was looking around his kingdom desperately for his daughter, Desy.
"It was those two boys, I know it!" he proclaimed, "And where is Sir Leon!"
A boy then came running up to him.
"Sire, one of the cavalry men spotted the two boys and the princess entering the Forest of Memonites."
"What?!? Are you certain?"
"Yes your highness. I am sor-"
"No time for crying, we must assemble a troop to go and get my daughter.
"Megaman!"
A young man came running at the sound of the king's voice.
"Yes milord?"
"Gather your men; we ride to the Forest of Memonites to get my daughter back!"
"As you wish."
Th00p, Megaman and 3 other riders rode towards the Forest of Memonites. They got into it, and began trotting on their horses. Th00p couldn't help but feeling paranoid in such a dangerous place.
"Stay together men." Whispered Th00p.
"Alright, Pit?" said Megaman.
"Ai Sir."
"OB?"
"Here Capt'n."
"Davis?"
"Davis!? Where are you?" cried out Th00p.
"Men, alpha formation, stick close and weapons at the ready" said Megaman.
There was a cry from OB as he was swept off his horse and dragged up into the treetops and another from Pit.
"Sire, stay close to m-" but before Megaman could finish, he was gone, and Th00p, King of Elmoth was all alone.
"Wh...who's there?!? Come out, I say!" said Th00p, mustering whatever courage he had left in him.
There was a clap from the trees and his horse bucked up and he fell off and onto the ground. As he sat there for a second, he came to his senses and felt a thud on his lap. As he looked down, it was the rotted corpse, half eaten it seemed, of the boy who was at his castle, Dark. He let out a faint shriek and he looked up, but before he knew what happened, he saw fifty-eight sharp jagged teeth flying down towards his head.


Chapter 9
Pixel bent down to Red and asked him if he was alright.
"Yeah... I'm alright." Pixel went and looked at what Red was frightened by and felt a searing pain in his arm as he saw the mark of Shade etched into the bin with blood. He quickly turned around and told Red and Desy to just keep on going. Red and Desy led the way out of Hyrule and Pixel followed clutching his arm and wondering how he had gotten himself into this.
Red, Desy and Pixel walked for what seemed like miles when they stumbled upon what looked like a ghost town.
"Let's go over this way to see if there's somewhere we can find something to eat." said Pixel.
"Sounds good to me" replied Red.
They walked around for a little and stumbled upon an old bar, they walked in and saw a shadey looking character behind the bar, Red had his hand on the hilt of his sword just in case and walked up to the man and asked where they were and who he was.
"My name is Dennis, it's a pleasure to meet you, and as for your current whereabouts, you are at the town of Undertow, this bar is called Soup Ream, can I get you anything?"
"Where is everyone?" asked Desy.
"There.. around, some folks leave town this time of year, gets a little too hot for them."
"Could we get some water then please?" asked Red.
"Course! Just sit tight, i'll be right back with it."
Red watched as Dennis left the room, and he turned to the other two.
"What do you think about this guy? Pixel, you're quiet, what is it?"
"Nothing, nothing, I'm just a little.. uh... Tired, that's all." he replied.
"Well, we should just get our water and--"
Red's voice trailed off as a dart caught him in the neck, and at the same time Desy fell to the ground. Pixel stood up and looked down the the two people that lay before him and he wiped a tear from his eye.


Chapter 10
Red felt himself soaring through an open void and saw faces of people as he was falling. He saw Thoop, and Leon, and Desy. He stretched out to reach Desy's face, but before he touched it, Pixels face appeared and Red awoke in a cold sweat. He sat there for a moment and took in his bearings and saw that he was in a small room, he couldn't see a door or any windows, all he could see was a drain in the middle of the floor and a little can on one side of the room. He got up, he felt his head throbbing with pain as he did. He began to walk around the room, feeling the walls as he went, looking for any signs of something to get out of there, as he approched the drain, he heard faint footsteps coming from a side of the room. He ran back into the corner he awoke in, and laid down pretending to sleep but keeping an eye open a bit just in case something came in. One of the walls began to move slightly, and he saw 2 figures step into his little room. They looked mid-sized, not really built, but not lazy, he could take them, he thought to himself.
"Ha. Look at that Frod, still out like a light, I don't think Jonathan should have made those darts so strong, this kids only a stick, that much of a dose, he'll be out for another week in here!"
"Yeah, well, at least we get paid good to just come in here and look at him for a second, let's get out of here and get some BBQ."
As they began to walk back to the door, Red jumped up and threw himself at the one of the men and smoothly, with the skill of a fighter, snapped his neck and let him drop to his feet, Red looked at the other guy with bloodlust eyes, and watched as he ran away. Red picked up the dagger that was in the mans belt, and threw it at the man running, Red watched the dark figure stumble for a second, then fall flat on the ground. He quickly ran and grabbed the dagger from the mans back and withdrew into the shadows of the hall.

Desy could feel herself being pulled up and shaken, she weaily opened her eyes and saw the face of a man she thought she would never have to see.
"Y...y....you.....", she weakly managed to say, "What are you doing here?"
"What am I doing here?!", said the man, "Haha, this is my castle my sweetheart, and you and I are going to rule over all Ecthelion by the time this little war is over and done with."
"I'd never help you Jonathan."
"Oh... I beg to differ."
Red crawled along the walls in the shadows until he found what appeared to be an exit, he quietly opened the door and walked through it. He sheilded his eyes from the blinding light of the sun and took a quick look around and ran. He ran for some time, and he felt his legs weaking, he glanced around at his surroundings, but all he could see was sand and rocks of this barron desert. He kept walking and slowly he felt his legs giving up and his eyes wanting to shut. He tried to fight it for as long as he could, and before he could catch himself, he collapsed onto the ground.


Chapter 11
Red woke up and looked around, he was beginning to get annoyed with blacking out all the time. He was in a small hut it seemed, lying down on a bed made from reeds.
"Ahh, you are awake!", proclaimed a familiar voice, "I was beginning to worry about your state."
"Wha... Pixel! What happened!? Where's Desy?"
"Calm down, I will tell you everything.", said Pixel, "You see, My people from the fields of Jigorokano were killed by Jonathan and his mighty army, I was the Cheiften of the feilds, and when Jonathan came to me, after my people were dead, he made me a deal, I find you, and lead you to Shade so he could capture you. I said I would do it, for I did not wish to die, not at that time. So he sent me off to you, and that is when I met you in the woods. When we got to Shade, he was "Dennis" from that bar we went to, remember?"
"Yes. Why did you-"
"Listen, I wasn't thinking straight before, I am now though, and I want to help you fight Jonathan."
"Where is Desy?"
"She would still be with Jonathan, I overheard people talking in his building about how he wanted the princess of Elmoth as his queen of all the land for when this war is over."
"We must stop him!"
"We will Red, we will, but first we need to gain more allies, to aid us in this battle. We need to amas troops and bring everyone who opposes Jonathan together for a final battle!"
"Well what are we waiting here for?! Let's go!"

Desy was struggling against Jonathans grip, but he was much too strong for her.
"My, my, you are a fiesty one aren't you?", said Jonathan, "I think we need to get ourselves a little more in order, don't you Krasko?"
"Yes, I will go get her something now.. hehe."
"Come my love,", whispered Jonathan, "Let us sit down together and drink a toast."
"Here you go master Jonathan.", said Krasko as he handed a small goblet to Jonathan.
"Here, drink this my darling Desy, and we shall love eachother forever."
Jonathan held the golden goblet up to Desy's mouth, she looked at it with fear striken eyes. She had once heard of a potion that could seal a womens heart to a man's, and she could become forever his, but it was only a myth, a childrens fairy tale, there was no way Jonathan, although he was very powerful, could have obtained such a potion. Jonathan proved too strong for Desy and he forced open her mouth, and down went the mysterious liquid, down her throat.
"There, now how do we feel my love?", asked Jonathan.
"I feel wonderful dear, is there anything I can get for you?", asked Desy.
"Accually, if you could--", Jonathan was cut off as his servant Krasko came over and whispered in his ear.
"uh... Master... the prisoner has... well.. escaped.. and two of our guards appear to be dead."
With this news, Jonathan jumped up and cried out for his general, Draco.
"Y...yes M'lord?", asked Draco when he came to the chambers.
"Draco, I want you to send scouts out and search everywhere untill you find the boy that escaped from here! I don't care if you need the whole damn army! FIND HIM!
"Y...yes Master, right away."
With that, Draco hurried off to do his lords deeds.
Jonathan sat back down beside his queen Desy, and looked down at her as she cuddled her head on his chest. He smiled to himself as he thought of how good this war is going for him, and soon enough, all of Ecthelion shall belong to him.


Chapter 12
Red and Pixel started out on their quest to find allies and defeat Jonathans army. Pixel knew of some people who may be able to help them, it just might take a little persuading he said.
"First", said Pixel, "We should go to Mem, and his Memonites."
"What? Never!"
"I know how they can be, they are barbarous and mad, but Jonathan is taking Mem's land as much as he is our land. If we can get Mem to join our cause, it will add a formitable force to our party."
"Well.. I guess it's worth a try."
Our two galant men travelled long and far, through thickets of woods, and through streams and rivers, until, finally, they came upon a tattered tartan of the Memonites.
"Just follow my lead.", whispered Pixel.
"Ok, but if anything seems fishy, i'm lettin' my sword do the rest of the talking."
"Fair enough, but keep it civil in here, and for god's sake man, fix your hair."
They walked into the camp of the Memonites, and were soon met by three battered men.
"What's this 'ere then eh?"
"Well Willy, it's obvious ain't it? It's the princess and her jester!"
"Arr harr harr, that's a good one, haha, yar, a good one mate."
"Please", asked Pixel, "I am more like a Prince, my friend here is a mere Donkey, haha!"
"Haharr, good one princess!"
"What say you two eh? What you be doin in our camp?"
"Well good men, my name is Pixel, this here pal o' mine is Red. We are on a quest, could you please take us to Mem?"
"Aye... Quest you say? hmmm.... hehe, what do you think boys? Is the princess and her donkey good enough to see Mem?"
"I don't know Billy. What do you think Milly?"
"Well Willy, if we's all agree, I think they need a little test before they can go see the great Mem. See they can hold their own in a battle."
"Aye! Find idea Milly, Let's go to the ring, see if these two lads can take us on."
The three men led Red and Pixel over to a patch of dirt, encircled by a few stakes in the ground to mark a crud circle. The three men took up their sheild and swords, and staggered around the ring. Red unseathed his sword and looked around as a group of people began to form around the circle. Pixel withdrew a short sword, and stood beside Red.
"So? You two think you can take on the three of us eh? Here are the terms then. If you... haha.. beat us, we shall take you to Mem. If you lose... well.... you'll be dead."
"Dead?", asked Pixel.
"Hahaharrr!! Yes, you spine blaggard, we fight to the death here. So then.. Are ye ready to die?"
"Let's get this goin.", said Red.
The three men lunged at Pixel and Red who jumped back and took a staggered stance beside each other.
Red shouted over to Pixel, "Stay with me, if we separate, they can take us easily, form a block with your sheild."
Red and Pixel knelt down with Pixel holding his sheild up. The three attackers stopped and looked down at Red and Pixel, hiding behind the sheild, and they started to laugh. Red fell on his back, kicked the sheild up with his foot, as his did, Pixel got up and as the sheild flung up from the kick, he caught it, and whipped it at Milly. It hit him in the throat, and he fell to the ground like a rock, clutching at his throat. Willy and Billy stared down in amazement, and then screamed and shot forward at Pixel, swords flailing. Red jumped up, and swung his sword low, he caught Billy in the ankle, and Billy cried out in pain as blood began pooring out of a gaping wound in his right ankle, Red stumped on his wrist and heard a crack, Billy dropped his sword and his hole body went limp. Willy lunged at Pixel and swung down at his arm. Pixel jumped out of the way, but not fast enough, Willy's sword caught his forearm and sent a gash into it, Pixel cried out, and Red spun around and thrust his sword into Willy's back. Pixel starred blankly as Willy coughed, a sword tip sticking out of his stomach, he breathed a final breath, and fell to the ground, and his eyes glazed over.
Red stood there, catching his breath, and he heard a clapping over the shouts of the men standing around the ring. It got suddenly quiet, and Red turned around, and saw that the clapping was coming from a man standing over in the shadows.
"Well done, well done."
"Who are you?", asked Red, "You want some too?"
"My, my, feisty aren't we? I am Mem, leader of the Memonites. You fight well, who are you?"
"I am Red, son of Blue who was killed by Jonathan."
"I see, and what pleasure do I owe you?"
"We", said Pixel, "Have come to ask a favor of you."
"Come", said Mem, "Into my tent where we can talk in private."
Red and Pixel followed Mem as he led them away from the ring. Red watched as two men stood over the fallen bodies of Milly and Billy, Mem gave them a quick nod, and they swords were thrust into the bodies of the two men laying on the ground. Red turned away and followed the man before him.


Chapter 13

Hyrule Castle [Defy] November 25 2006 12:21 AM EST

lukey, i remember the alatar stories,... they are what inspired me to write my story about the fayt of hyrule....

I lost internet after about chaptter 6 , this will be a good way for me to catch back up, and maybe add and ending to it.

{CB1}Lukeyman November 25 2006 9:11 AM EST

Awesome!

Oh, 1 more thing...

To make it so that people don't use others ideas...

EMAIL ME YOUR ENTRYS!!! davelukeman@gmail.com

Thank you.

RedWolf November 25 2006 7:35 PM EST

I have an idea. Instead of giving one person the task of finishing the entire story, give one chapter to each person interested. That way I would be able to write at least a little bit ;-)

{CB1}Lukeyman November 25 2006 7:51 PM EST

Well, Write what you want and send it to me, if it doesn't excally finish the story, i still could accept it.
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