Sefton and Johnnywas wrote a song!! (in Off-topic)

QBJohnnywas December 19 2006 3:47 AM EST

Back in September I ran a contest where I asked people to write a love/lyric poem that I would set to music to celebrate my first wedding anniversary. The winner was Sefton. I started work on a tune but then hit serious writer's block which lasted until about two weeks ago. At which point I sat down and composed a tune for Seft's words.

The finished result can be found at the following:

The track is called Red Rose. Hope you like Seft!

Sefton, September 5 2006 4:15 PM EDT
OK I totally blame Johnnywas for this. As I spun ideas for a song in my head, this kept spilling out and getting in the way. Since I have no other place to deposit it, I deposit it here, or it will never go away. I have no idea if you could make it a song, but I think it is a better poem.

This Rose

Red rose, red rose, come hither to,
for in your thorny stem profess
I plucked you from the solid ground
denying nature's bountied quest.

Red rose, red rose, please do not weep,
you petals on the ground I tread,
For in your dieing gasping breath,
my love for her grows within its stead

Oh flower Oh Joy Oh Spring
with buds a-burstin and birds that sing
Oh night Oh stars Oh endless sky
A girl whose beauty does not lie

Red rose, red rose, ask not from me,
with your accusing leaves a-whither
I did what I thought I must do
a bouquet for my love I must gather

Red rose, red rose, I shed a tear,
But not for the loss of your sweet mother
I shed my tear for all to see,
I shed my tear for yet another

Oh smile, oh love, oh flame
I gathered this with not a shame
Oh sight, oh life, oh woman true
I gathered this rose just for you

Xiaz on Hiatus December 19 2006 4:08 AM EST

Wow, that was great, your influences really came through in this song. But, as Sefton said in his remarks, it is better as a poem than a song.

Song lines could have been better shortened to give make it a more fluid listening. But, hey, great work!

Miandrital December 19 2006 5:03 AM EST

"Song lines could have been better shortened to give make it a more fluid listening. But, hey, great work! "

I disagree, I think the lines world have been better if they were a bit longer and more sentency, seemed a little too disjointed for my liking.

I however really like the voice of whoever sang that. Music fit well and overall it was rather nice listening.

Good Job JW!

QBJohnnywas December 19 2006 5:08 AM EST

I did try and edit, but some of the lines didn't work as an edit, so in the end I just shovelled it all in! Plus I thought it was too good to cut.


QBJohnnywas December 19 2006 5:11 AM EST

Oh, vocally this song is me and my guitar and keyboards.

(The other songs on the site are sung by my musical partner in crime Navin, apart from the spoken parts and backing vocals which are me.)

Slashundhack [We Forge Our Own Stuff] December 19 2006 6:53 AM EST

Dude that my space thing wouldn't load red rose for me .Gave me trouble last time to.I'll try later . Oh! that period at end of address threw me for a loop.Liked the other three though. Uh I don't suppose you could dip your self in blood and do a little hellbent hard core metal death grind foot stomping devil music?Hum probably change the flavour of the band.....,never mind.

AdminQBGentlemanLoser [{END}] December 19 2006 7:29 AM EST

Ohhhh... ;) Will listen tonight when I get in and have speakers. ;)

PS. I've seen Johnny play live.

Twice. ;)

Beat that! Ha!

Miandrital December 19 2006 7:51 AM EST

Lazy Person Link.

48Zach December 19 2006 7:54 AM EST

Wow.. man I'm speechless. thats amazing dude.. Nice work.

QBJohnnywas December 19 2006 7:59 AM EST

'hellbent hard core metal death grind foot stomping devil music'

The Devil finds all that a little tiresome. He's getting old after all. A bit of cool jazz is more to his liking. Honestly.

AdminQBVerifex [Serenity In Chaos] December 19 2006 12:20 PM EST

That is very cool Johnny! I like to hear it! You took a poem and made it a song without too much of a hitch, great job! Sounds cool too congrats! :)

BootyGod December 19 2006 12:33 PM EST

I hate websense...

AdminQBnovice [Cult of the Valaraukar] December 19 2006 12:40 PM EST

next time I get a random friends request from some random band I'll look more than twice...hahah

good stuff man!

QBSefton [Black Cheetah Bazaar] December 19 2006 2:43 PM EST

Johnnywas, that was awesome my friend. I wish my words were better suited as lyrics, but you did a GREAT job with them!

Your voice reminds me a little of a young Bob Dylan. I wish you the same level of success as Dylan enjoyed ;)

Anyway, I played it for wild, and she loved, but she is longing on for the first time in quite a while to tell you that herself :)

Wonderful work!

wldflr December 19 2006 2:56 PM EST

That was awesome! Absolutely lovely. Thank you for putting the words to music. As you can imagine, it's a bit special to me :)

wldflr hugs Johnny

QBJohnnywas December 19 2006 4:03 PM EST

Thank you guys. ;) x

Arorrr December 19 2006 4:35 PM EST

That is great, Johnny. That is some talent you have there.

I agree with Sefton. You have a great vocal.

Slashundhack [We Forge Our Own Stuff] December 20 2006 11:52 AM EST

Finally used IE and I heard red rose.How come no English accent on that one . Would have added a bit of spice, for me anyway.
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