Calling All Music Lovers;; Give me your opinion! (in Off-topic)

I was informed of posting something on here if I was looking for some opinions, so I believe you guys won't let me down.

A few days ago, my girlfriend asked me to write a love song about her. She knows I used to write songs in the past, and decided she wanted me to write one for her now. I figured since she wanted one, I'd see what I could do. It's been awhile since I've tried to compose anything (over 2 years) and am looking to get peoples opinions on what I have come up with.

It was mostly written on the spot in about 10 minutes, but I gave it some fine-tuning later on. Let me know what you guys think.

Ratings on 10 are appreciated :)

Thanks.
--Emotion

Always On My Mind

Do you remember
The first day we met
What you were wearing
Or what we had said

Would you go back
To how things were before
Or do you ever think
You could have gotten more

Your smile makes me smile
Your love means the world
It canﾒt be explained
So maybe thatﾒs why

Youﾒre always on my mind
All I can think about is you
And the incredible feeling
When you said I love you too

First kiss with you in my arms
Really made me believe
We could be together forever
And I hope you will never leave

Your smile makes me smile
Your love means the world
It canﾒt be explained
So maybe thatﾒs why

Youﾒre always on my mind
All I can think about is you
And the incredible feeling
When you said I love you too

It only took three months
To realize my feelings were true
I think itﾒs safe to say
Iﾒve fallen in love with you

Your smile makes me smile
Your love means the world
It canﾒt be explained
So maybe thatﾒs why

Youﾒre always on my mind
All I can think about is you
And the incredible feeling
When you said I love you too

Before I end this song
I have just one thing to say
And thatﾒs I love you babe
And I hope you feel the same way

Unfortunately, something malfunctioned when I posted and whenever there is an apostrophe in the lyrics there is a symbol in front of it.

Sorry about that.

Lyrics are pretty good, but it's hard to judge such a thing when you don't know how the melody or chord progression are supposed to go. But lyrically, it's pretty cool, if a bit sappy.

Overall, I'd rate it a 7/10. Here's why:

Quite decent, but it seems like it would fit better if you worked on the rhymes a bit more. I especially liked verse 2, and it would be interesting if you could make the rest of the song fit to it. Also, maybe you shouldn't use the word 'smile' twice in the chorus.
And maybe two verses before the two chorus verses would add extra dimension, and keep a pattern that you set with the first four.

Admirable effort! I'm sure she'll be happy with it. :)

"I especially liked verse 2, and it would be interesting if you could make the rest of the song fit to it."

If you mean this verse:

Would you go back
To how things were before
Or do you ever think
You could have gotten more

I was actually considering changing that verse so it fit better with the song :) Also, adding another verse in before the chorus may work like in the first section. I'll take a look at it. All about being able to come up with a fitting one I guess; I could possibly move some things around as well.

Thanks for the feedback.
--Emotion

i read half of it and i couldn't read it anymore, way too flustered.

*whew*

wish i had a boyfriend like you to write me a song like this.